Additions to Storyboard

• Graveyard shot- More close-ups


• Slower getting out of bed after alarm sounds in shots 11 + 12


• More shots of pictures of dad around her room


• After bedroom scene we need shots of her walking to the bathroom rather than just appearing there


• Close ups of post it notes


• In bathroom cupboard show 3 toothbrushes or a razor to show elements of her dads existence


• More hints of dad being dead e.g. pictures missing from the wall as she walks to kitchen


• Use a cracked mirror to show she is sad


• Quick paced shots of her getting cereal, bowl and spoon for breakfast


• Close ups of post its on fridge


• shot of girl sighing in shot 22 when she sees the milk is empty


• girl leaves bowl empty as she walks out the house to school


• before shot 28 show her waiting for the bus and not it just appearing, shots from behind and front and showing a dull day


• close ups of hands opening purse to get money and see a picture of her and dad then she shuts the purse.


• shot of her getting off the bus and walking into school


• hear the school bell and see her walking into her class


• after her class finishes bell rings again and show fast paced shots of her clearing away


• After boy walks past in shot 34 show them looking at eachother from far away as well as close ups


• in classroom close up of what she is reading and hear her reading


• on whiteboard behing teacher have written what she is feeling


• close up shots of her clearing things before knocking pen on the floor in shot 39


• after pen shot and them accidental touching close up of his eyes and then hers


• Instead of her just appearing at her house show a shot of the bus driving past her house and front of her house
• in her room a close up of her face up against the window like the shot of her on the bus
• close up of her hand knocking the photo off the side
• before she takes the photo out of the frame show the broken glass
• dont show her dad is dead on the calendar just put something like "dad 2pm"
• follow hands around and placing photo on pillow, camera stays stationary on photo on pillow as she gets up
• we need to show it is another day instead of her just appearing at school again e.g. getting into bed shutting curtains etc...
• shot of trees/house in the morning then her getting breakfast again, close up of post it on table showing her mum has left her again
• quick shots of bowl in sink, grabbing bag, shutting door
• pan of front of school in the morning
• before bell rings show close up of her at her desk looking distant
• shot of bell ringing and her picking up all her books and leaving for the door
• when buying the coffee in shot 62, have the camera coming up towards her (like the first shot in graveyard) then turns her head and boy is stood there and offers to pay for coffee
• change the note on her hand as she holds her hand out to not make it too obvious that her dad is dead and just write something like "dad 2pm"
• shots of empty school before she leaves and show her leaving through the gates
• shots of road, trees, cars with music
• shot of her walking to graveyard
• camera infront as she is walking towards the grave then switches to it following her and then switches again to the camera looking at her from where the grave is and she walks towards it and looks down.