Today has been a complete day of being in the mac room editing our short film for as long as we can and have managed to get all our shots and have made our short film, however, we are going to need to make it shorter as it is only supposed to last 5 minutes and at the moment it is 6 and a half!
I think we are going to stay after school tonight to finish editing our film, we need to add in our music and make our film fit the time that we are allowed. This should be possible as we can both stay as long as we need to.
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ReplyDeleteHello! This is my feedback from todays lesson,
ReplyDelete1. What did you think were the strengths of the work?
I thought that the shots flowed really well, especially at the start when she was walking through the graveyard, and it was interesting because you had used lots of shots which stopped it looking like just a girl walking through a graveyard, which may have been boring! I also thought that it was clever how you speeded the scenes up where she was getting ready because this stopped it being boring and repetative.
2.What did you rate as a weakness?
One weakness is I thought that maybe on the first scene where you see the picture of her dad, maybe you could make it a little bit clearer that its her dad because like we were saying some people thought it was her boyfriend which obviously isnt right! I think because we knew it was going to be her dad it was more clear but if we didnt know this then maybe it would be easy to mistake him for her boyfriend?
3. What do you think the group should change?
I also thought that maybe you could see the male character more throughout the second half of the film, before he becomes the person who comes to comfort her at the grave, it did make sence because we had seen him in the classroom, but maybe you could show the build up to their relationship more before they are seen at the end, this might make it a bit clearer. However there is a part of me that likes how subtle the build up is because it makes it more of a surprise at the end?
4.What has the group still got to do?
I didnt think it seemed that there was much more for you to do, just add the titles and edit the sound where you need to extract the sounds of the wind which overlapped with the background music slightly, but this isnt really a big issue :) We also noticed that maybe you could add a few more transitions, as it jumps in a few places like we said.
Overall I thought that it was a really good idea, and even though Amy was sat next to us and we knew full well her dad wasnt dead I did feel a bit sad! I think that the music you have chosen made me feel sympathetic towards the character, so well done :)
jess xxxxx
Girls.
ReplyDeleteYou'll be getting a grade and feedback from Mr Ford and I on Friday but I would suggest that you watch this video to get an idea of how to create two different meanings via editing. If you watch this then what we say on Friday will make more sense (hopefully).
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N9kdHXrJYF8
Laura and Amy
ReplyDeleteRead either Mr Smith's blog or Mr Ford's blog to see the levels and marks for A2 work.
Main Task 23/40
Subsidiary Task 4/10
Main Task feedback
Targets and areas for improvement
Far too much walking. Stop walking
Stalker is unconvincing - no sense of menace.
180 degree rule broken several times
Pace is too slow (due to amount of walking)
Something needs to happen within the story (music needs more pace in places)
Good Points
Framing
Mise en scene
Holding a shot steady
Mr Smith and Mr Ford
hello,
ReplyDeletefirstly, after watching your film of tuesday i feel like you have chosen a really good issue to deal with in your short film
what did you think were the strengths of the film?
I thought the short film had many strength, as i've said above the issue dealt with is a strong and sensitive subject which i believe they have dealt with appropriately. Another feature that works well is the narrative, it has a clear beginning and end. The shots fluently flow after each other, and the continuity it a constant throughout, with good use of lighting and variation of shots.The different locations used within the film really add to the mise en-scene aspect, from the graveyard to her bedroom. One scene i feel works especially well is when amy is in the kitchen, and we see the post-it notes all over the kitchen from her mum. This really creates empathy with her character, and reflects her lonliness now her dad isn't around. I also think this is shot really well in order for the post-it notes to be read!
What did you rate as a weakness?
Overall, there were no huge weaknesses within there film. I just think if i did not know the story line previous that made there should be more emphasis on the fact it is her dad htat has passed away. This is due to the fact you can't really see his face that clear on the pictures, this could be changed by maybe adding a few more close up shots to develop his charcter and his relationship towards Amy a little more. One other aspect that again could be made a little clearer is the 'stalker' i didn't initially think of the boy in this way and it was only til it was explained to me that i understood it! you could change this by just adding him to a couple more shots with him in the background, just so an audience identify he is always there.
What do you think the group should change?
i dont want to just repeat what Jess has said above but one other aspect that again could be made a little clearer is the 'stalker' i didn't initially think of the boy in this way and it was only til it was explained to me that i understood it! you could change this by just adding him to a couple more shots with him in the background, just so an audience recognise he is always there. Another thing you could add just to increase the tension and curiosity of their relationship could be done through techniques such as a change in music or pace.
What has the group still got to do?
In regards to their short film they just need to cut it down, i picked out a few shots when watching it that they could do this to. For example, the walking shot during the graveyeard scene and amy's alarm clock scene. However, this will be very easily achievalble for them. I didn't get the chance to see their subsidiary tasks, so aslong as they've got them sorted or near enough, their group seems to be right on task and im very impressed!
I hope these answers help, you know i thought your film was really good :) just try and cut it down abit more because then it will increase the pace and keep everyone gripped! well done, caitlin xxxxxxxxxx